Twinkle Burrow

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The final one

A story of how a person is motivated to carry on with his lovers words in letters, until he finally wins

We open with a shot of the proposal, I will be back soon just let me finish the exam

The guy settles into his new study room and begins in earnest each day at 6, (before he goes, he writes a letter to her, we see the subject as the final one. he goes to write the exam, fails, writes again,(high neergy scenes) fails, black out. (ticking of a clock, it is very late, guy is sitting at his table, tears on the wood or he looks really distraught. he cries for he has given up, begins to pack out desk. Puts away the books, finds old letter stack underneath. Picks out one letter, starts to read

It is a letter telling how they met. Their innocent feelings and first hand joy, everything is bright, until they must part ways.He has to leave her, they see each other last at the bus stand. Then each day she catches a bus from there, so she looks at the space he had been in. While this happens, he writes to her (his signature envelope) and some days it can be seen in her hand as she waits. In between this, there can be moments of him trying to get back to her, fighting with family, writing letters. These moments can transition using the bus passing the screen Until one day, she reads, looks to her left, bus passes the screen, he appears.

Or here you show the proposal and the events immediately before- he tells her he will become an officer, she feels uneasy but he gives her a ring (we find out later that this ring means a lot and it is now coming from a guy who was irresponsible)

Transition

To our guy in the present, he looks motivated, begins to put books back, puts the whole stack of letters on table, studies till midngiht, sleeps, blackout.

Next flashback- they are a couple, happy at first, then the fights. He focuses on friends and drinking, she feels insecure, breakup, the ring is given back (maybe the guy wakes up from the trance, he has been reading these letters after his session, he should sleep now, could imply they are still broken up)

Next flashback they have been apart, he has quit and become better, he realises what he lost each day, they reconcile, wait for he, then one day he finds ambition to beceome an officer, turns around and presents the ring to her

Back to present day, he puts down the letter, picks up the hallticket, and sets out to write the exam. Blackout.

We see the words getting written-

Every day of my life, it feels like I have lived for you. I have no complaints my love, if given the chance, I would do this all over, all the same, all for you. I love you, for you are life itself. Thank you for everything you have done.

I once promised you I will come back to you as an officer. . (remove this if using the if you receieve it line)I will win), and then we will be together forever. I am going to write that exam now

((use this if going with extended ending) If you receieve this, it means I won and that ) (This is the final one.(remove this if going with previous line))

(could end it here) If not

Tear falls onto the screen, just as it does we hear a knock on the door and snap to current

She looks up, tears on her eyes, he comes in, she gets up and hugs him, he tells her to go out/she goes outside the room. he is about to leave, notiecs the letter, smiles, puts it back into the envelope.

She breaks out of the trance, he has come into the room, calling her for dinner, she gets up, teary and hugs him, we see the angle with letter in foreground and them hugging in the background, the focus comes onto the letter, which is now stamped and we see the subject- the final one

Or, they hug, he sends her for dinner, sees the letter, smiles, puts it into the envelope, leaves it on the table- it says the final one.

You could make it so that show the envelope with the final one written on the envelope. This is when he has failed twice. You can make it to seem as if it is a suicide letter, whereas in reality it is a letter of love.